Grass around me, so green.
I feel my head telling me to go to sleep.
People laughing, people playing frisbee.
The frisbee smiling as it whizzes past me.
Sky as blue as the ocean, so blue.
How, I ask myself, do I move?
The people around me
One man with a hat on his head, his clothes baggy.
I wonder, how can someone stand having their pants that saggy?
A woman with a child walks by.
How, oh my, can a child be so happy,
When everything around him seems so dull?
In this poem, I used a lot of end-stopped lines. Also, I used personification talking about the frisbee smiling, and in the same line, I used an onomatopoeia with the word whizzes. In the second stanza, there is an end rhyme in baggy and saggy. There is an internal rhyme in "A woman with a child walks by./ How, oh my,.../.
Working Times
2/11- 10 minutes in class (Allegiant)
2/12- 10 minutes in class (Allegiant)
2/12- 30 minutes- Working on final draft of paper
2/13- 10 minutes in class (Allegiant)
2/14- 10 minutes in class (Allegiant)
2/16- 60 minutes (Allegiant)
Total: 130 minutes
Hey Grace! I liked how you gave things personification! I also liked how you wrote " so blue" or "so green".
ReplyDeleteHey Grace, your poem is great. I can just visualize the park as you're described it through your poem. It's a happy and pleasant poem, I love it!
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